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Post by Father Anthony Diem on Sun Jan 05, 2014 10:30 pm

Trashing him, will start from scratch.


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Re: Gerik Correl

Post by John Smith on Mon Jan 06, 2014 12:52 pm

Going to hold off on voting until I can get a complete list of group members. Otherwise, you're being approved into a group that doesn't exist.

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Post by Father Anthony Diem on Mon Jan 06, 2014 1:59 pm

sounds good Smile

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Re: Gerik Correl

Post by John Smith on Fri Jan 10, 2014 1:03 pm

Father Anthony Diem wrote:Name: Gerik Correl

Age: 40

Gender: Male

Appearance: Gerik suffers a jagged scar both wide and long running along his nose and down his cheek a little ways. His face consists of rough weathered features, as well as naturally strong appearances in the structure of his face.  From his cheekbones to his chin. A ragged looking shave is also present. He is very well built and muscular in appearance. Not boasting maximum human strength but all around amazing strength non the less. He has a slight beard at the bottom of his chin that also spans across his stubbly cheeks. Gerik's eye's are green, and his hair is brown. This hair is not very well kept and tends to gravitate all to the back of his head. Falling down it and stopping at the neck. Occasionally strands will fall out of place if he is not wearing his trademark headband. He tends to wear a dark blue or purple shirt as well as loose but well fitting tan pants. A black belt and boots nearly always accompanying him.


Gerik is the one smoking.

More detail would be nice.

Nyeh wrote:Equipment: Gerik's most commom piece of equipment is a purple headband which keeps his hair back and rests partly on his forehead and partly on the top of his scalp. He has a replacement in a puch on his flak jacket. Gerik's flack jacket is a dark grey in color sporting a pistol and a grenade. As well as three rounds of ammo for that pistol. On his back along a strap there will be his rifle. With three extra rounds also on his person. One on his side attached to the flak jacket, on his shin and another attached to his belt. Gerik carries a pocket knife and a pair of bayonets, one silver tipped the other normal, which can be attached to his rifle. All of his guns carry a magazine already in them, and every weapon of his is blessed. One magazine of each gun is silver.


M27: 5.56×45mm NATO Caliber with thirty round magazines.


P226: Caliber .357 SIG, 12 round magazine.


Bayonet: 14 inches. Silver coated and tipped, replaced regularly: Bayonet 2: 14 inches. Fine steel.

Grenade: Very little to talk about. Small palm sized frag grenade does devastating damage to creatures within thirty feet of it, taken from silver shrapnel. light damage within forty five.

So, jacket and headband are both clothing.

Bayonets for guns in the age when people can fire more than one shot a minute are entirely pointless.

Nothing but weapons here.

No equipment wrote:Race:Human


Abilities: Guns: Gerik is an excellent shot with his weapons. Especially shooting at moving targets at mid range and closer. With both his rifle and his pistol. Having experience in shooting since the age of twelve, and experience at fighting monster since twenty six. In fact there are very few members in the organization  who can match, much less out do his sharp shooting.

You don't really give us any reason to see him as an exceptional shot. You're telling rather than showing at this point. The only example is that he can hit at medium and close range...like every other soldier can hopefully do.

Bad wrote:Melee: Gerik can use a knife, or knife like object including daggers and bayonets with a degree of skill. having trained to fight with a bayonet attached to a weapon, and unattached. He is both trained and experienced but by no means a master.

Tolerance: Gerik has not only a high tolerance to mental afflictions and physical afflictions. But also a high tolerance built up to alcohol. Having been faithfully drinking nearly every day after a few years of fighting against vampires. Now while most people seeing the amount of alcohol he consumes believe that he must be a dunk. This is not actually true. As now in order to feel many affects at all he must consume more than the normal person would. He is also no stranger to hard drinks and can down them with ease and grace.

That's...interesting.

Kay then wrote:Abilities: Gerik in his youth was a bit stronger and a little faster. Boasting peak human condition but aged has deterred him a little bit. Thus now these abilities including speed are slightly below peak. However, his aim has only got even better. Being  

Organization: D.P.C.C.

Seems like this got cut off.

Incomplete wrote:Personality: Gerik is a mellow and easy going fellow, but fierce in battle and loyalty. Somewhat of a drunk his body always seems to permeate some kind of alcoholic smell. Though he is rarely ever drunk, he will commonly be seen drinking, and a smoke or two is also not out of the question. He really doesn't give any thought to the effects of these on his health, not expecting to live long anyway. Genuinely surprised he has even lived this long.

Gerik tries to live his life as kindly as possible, and as generously too. Though the later composes mainly of offering other people drinks. Having seen to much of the gore and death that fills the supernatural world. He has declared that he has no time to waist with hate, ad envy, regret, and anger. As such it is nearly impossible to catch him in any of these emotions. Whilst Gerik is not suicidal, he would easily go out of his way in to danger to save fellow comrades.

Some might take these qualities as bad things depicting a crazy man, or perhaps a lazy man. But in reality they are the qualities of a strong man. A man who is able to keep his head and remain calm in almost any situation. Still having the gusto and energy to do something however in it.

Rank: Adjutant/ Soldier

Lazy? Guy fights monsters on a daily basis. How lazy could he be?

Short, though. Lots of other areas that could be covered in here.

Pocketto no Coin wrote:Biography: Gerik was born in Britain and raised in a normal family, with no siblings but two decent parents. Often going hunting with his father. Out of want, he joined the military after high school. Not having many other plans besides going to college and getting help through the military to do so. At one point he had plans to become a doctor. But that would all change, when he found that he was a natural soldier, and commander. Not to mention one of the best shots around with his weapons. After being promoted to the rank of sergeant and leading a small group of men for a while. Gerik stepped out of the military life. Having received a few scars, a wealth of wisdom, effective training, and finally a thirst for alcohol.



You just skipped past about twenty years of history in a single paragraph.

Too fast, can't handle it wrote:Shortly after he was approached by a business man seeking to hire a leader for his team of body guards. He asked Gerik if he would accept and offered him a good deal for payment, and so he did. So for a long while he worked as the leader of this mans team of body guards. Rarely having to act but always being effective when he did. What Gerik was not aware of at this time was that this man was one of the sponsors for the new up and coming organization known as the D.P.C.C. Which he asked Gerik if he would like to be apart of. Gerik at first shocked by this after being told of the groups purpose reluctantly volunteered out of a sense of duty to his country, and a want to protect people from the horrors of the night as best he could.

Yep, ex-military drunks are great bodyguards. Even better, just offer him an incredibly important military job for doing absolutely nothing while under the cover of bodyguarding.

He's taking the existence of vampires in stride. Just...believes the guy like he found out what an aglet is.

J wrote:Though Gerik has never complained if asked he would say that that was the worst mistake of his life, and often dream that he will find his long lost dream of having gone to college and becoming a doctor at the bottom a bottle. He never has, nor has any amount of the liquid courage given him the ability to resign. While he served the organization for years faithfully and effectively, being allowed to consume the alcohol that he does because of his good performances. He was eventually promoted to the position of adjutant, a body guard to the leader of his organization. He doesn't go on as many feild missions as he used to now that he has this job and his outlook has become a little more cheery, but he still feels the need to drink frequently.

You're mentioning a lot of stuff not in the personality here that should be.

I'm not convinced someone can keep their job, no matter how good, if they're a drunk and constantly drinking on the job. That's a recipe for failure.

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Re: Gerik Correl

Post by Elsa Wagner on Fri Jan 10, 2014 1:28 pm

The drinking would have been a fun comedy relief idea but John's right. By Military standards I don't think constant drinking is acceptable. I need you at top alertness at all times and being wasted isn't going to get me that.

Also I'm pretty sure drinking alot would do something to ruin that well built muscular thing you have going on. Alcohol is full of carbs which in turn become fat which would make it harder to maintain his physique.

Also I'm wondering why he's wearing a Flak Jacket. The Flak Jacket hasn't been used since Vietnam or Korea. And they also provide severely limited protection against Shrapnel, Explosions and Roundshot from Shotguns. Kevlar Vests is mainly what protects soldiers now that or CIRAS which is the best you can get in terms of military grade infantry protection.

I have no issues with the bayonets though I can't really see much use for them. Not many people go toe to toe in a CQC fight with a vampire. Zombies maybe anything higher though likely not.

Also as John pointed out. How does he set himself apart from other shooters. Most soldiers in the DPCC are trained to hit targets at short to medium range and even farther considering most of them are former Special Forces operators. Also how did he gain these skills?

Also....How did entering the military give him a thirst for alcohol? Did he see something traumatic or did he just decide to pick up a bottle and have at it?


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Re: Gerik Correl

Post by Father Anthony Diem on Fri Jan 10, 2014 5:22 pm

Thank you for all your comments guys Smile I will get to them pretty soon.

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Post by Father Anthony Diem on Fri Jan 17, 2014 5:05 pm

Gerik has been redone.

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Re: Gerik Correl

Post by John Smith on Wed Feb 19, 2014 7:52 pm

I don't remember if this is really ready to go or not. Is it?

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Re: Gerik Correl

Post by Father Anthony Diem on Thu Feb 20, 2014 12:16 am

Sure, Why not. Though if you have problem with Gerik's Cyborg abilities lying not in his durability then just say so as that is what this sheet depends on. Should save you some trouble.

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Re: Gerik Correl

Post by John Smith on Thu Feb 27, 2014 8:18 pm

I don't think this has been changed, actually. Reading over parts of it, it's the same problems as before.

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Re: Gerik Correl

Post by Father Anthony Diem on Sat Mar 01, 2014 12:53 pm

Really? Maybe none of my edits saved, darn this was a while ago I thought that edited it, a while. Get to this sometime soon I guess.

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Re: Gerik Correl

Post by Father Anthony Diem on Fri Mar 28, 2014 9:04 pm

Trashing Gerrick, I'm just going to start from scratch for this dude.

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Post by John Smith on Fri Mar 28, 2014 9:05 pm

Pretty sure we're going to have to can England, so don't bother with that until we figure it out.

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Post by Father Anthony Diem on Fri Mar 28, 2014 9:05 pm

Alright, Not enough people I'm imagining.

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